 PaBlikMM
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Date: March 27, 2005 @ 6:45 AM
great song ... amazing feeling in your voice ... and aysha too ... good work.
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Hatsy
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Date: March 27, 2005 @ 9:30 AM
A beautiful fragile song that will be pure heaven  with Aysha's rich textured voice singing her heart out over the guitar. The guitar is so full of feeling already & you can hear with Chris's emotional tone that this is gonna break our hearts by the time they've finished.    Look forward to hearing the new version as much as I have enjoyed listening to Funny already. Such amazing talent on Dmusic   A musical world within a world   
We'll hang around out here    If you don't mind.... ...Time does drag so....
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 Notary04
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Date: March 27, 2005 @ 11:47 AM
You've created the perfect accompaniment for those lyrics...I love that bass entrance! Some of your best vocal work yet, I must say, though a few spots just feel, well, funny. I can't wait to hear the final version. Oh man, and I do love that slick minimal beat you insert toward the conclusion. You're improving at an alarming rate, my friend
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rich2k4
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Date: March 27, 2005 @ 9:44 PM
awesome stuff man, what do you use to record. great tone
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 Woof
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Date: March 28, 2005 @ 3:50 AM
Once again, the chording gives a special quality to the overall feel here... and I have to agree your voice is sounding better on this as well!
I think you're getting a good feel for the balance between the melody and your singing...
I can see this working very well with Aysha's vocal, as there's a moody, jazzy flavor to this one...
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bradegel
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Date: March 28, 2005 @ 6:12 AM
I love the tone on the guitar...I would love to take a vocal crack at this one  Anyway...great stuff...sounds like you have a neat effect on the guitar but I cannot isolate what it is
Love it
Bradley
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Rodrica
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Date: March 29, 2005 @ 7:00 AM
Beautiful song...excellent songwriting. Memorable, soulful. Love the arrangement, especially the way the vocals are done, great instrumental solo too. I have to say it comes across more as song for male vocal than female...but I'll look forward to hearing Aysha's verson
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sqrlcub
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Date: April 1, 2005 @ 4:50 PM
It took me a bit to get here but I am here now.
The harmonic structure has a Pink Floydy type of sound since it has that bluesy type of feel to it with a pretty straightforward vocal melody. Love the bass line. It's groovy and nice and relaxed feeling. The sequential vocals ("day to day" and "I see you laughing, I hear you laughing") works for a really cool dramatic effect.
It's a good grooving piece you have there. I am more ambivalent towards the male/female split on the vocals. The words and meaning definately seem more male if that makes sense but I think a female's interpretation will turn the meaning of the song around from being like a bitter memory to something else. I'd have to hear it first.
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 freddemillio
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Date: April 3, 2005 @ 1:17 PM
Very dramatic rhythm and chord progression. Lots of raw emotions coming out. I like the guitar solos. They really hammer the emotional message through. They add to the feeling of love lost and longing.
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warmguns
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Date: April 17, 2005 @ 9:11 PM
Really enjoyable tune about a unenjoyable subject. Excellent work.
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BOWILLIE
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Date: April 19, 2005 @ 9:34 PM
nice acoustic sound..great lyrics and vocals too!
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 GTLive
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Date: April 19, 2005 @ 10:11 PM
Excellent tune! I really like the guitar tones in this one  
Cool songwriting also  
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leplume
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Date: April 19, 2005 @ 10:15 PM
Beautifully written song. Melancholy lyrics and good emotional singing.
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imemine
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Date: April 19, 2005 @ 11:55 PM
Nice sounding acoustic! I love how this builds from solo acoustic and voice to a little guitar melody-then bass and later drums. The voice coming in from left, center and right is a great effect and the doubling as well. Lyrics are thoughtfully written and totally fit the feel of the song. Well done!
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jd2theog
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Date: April 20, 2005 @ 3:41 AM
Cool song!Fine guitar playing,great performance. :clapping:
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BlueDeliverance
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Date: April 27, 2005 @ 11:34 PM
Well sung (an echo on those vocals would be sweet), and the bass is a nice touch; keeps it from getting melodramatic or boring. The drums are great as well, how bout some more of those?
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Cruel2bKind
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Date: April 30, 2005 @ 9:20 AM
Since you asked me to listen to this...here is your review.
You're voice is distorting/peaking, particularly right away in the beginning verse lines. Either the engineer let it clip or you were too close to the mic or the mic you were using to record the vocals couldn't handle the Hz. It could be a combination as well. You're also off key/pitchy in several places here.
During the chorus you're off key/pitchy in both harmony and lead vox. This is excessively apparent as the vox are again too high and distorting/clipping. During mixdown, you do want the vox higher than the instruments, but in this case it was too much. I couldn't hear the instruments behind the voices clearly.
As far as the instruments..the solo is very much off key all over the place. I'm not sure if the guitar is simply out of tune or if it's the scale you are playing. Most of the notes aren't in the tonic of the song or miss the majority of the scale of that minor chord the song is in (Am?), if that's the case.
The rhythm guitars are done in an interesting way, I will say. Doubled as they are, with the highs are in my left ear and the lower end is in my right. Sonically they sound good in the mix.
The 2nd solo is better at the outro, and is more-or-less in tune/correct notes.
I will say it sounds like you are trying to infuse a lot of "emotion" in the vocals. Based on the lyrics, that's a good idea...I'm wondering if, b/c the chord progression is in that minor tonic, and the moroseness of the lyrics, if you should keep the vocal melody a little more sad and somber and a little less "gritty"/angrier sounding...just a thought.
The drums, when they come in, are very soft in the mix...boosting them up would add a lot of power to the song when they hit. It was a nice idea to throw them in late in the song.
The bass guitar doesn't keep very good time with the rest of the rhythm guitars in spots. This is simply practice/tightening up. I'm guessing you've done those instruments all yourself, which is pretty cool that you're able to be somewhat competent in so many instrumental arenas...so this is just another observation. Sticking the beat with the bass is a huge matter, at least to me...as it typically drives a song (esp w/o drums, and then keeping time with drum is just as important to maintain that coherent, smooth jam-feeling).
Chris, this is a pretty decent arrangement. It's not something I'd say is ready to be sent in to an A&R rep or anything like that as it is recorded now, but it's a fair recording and tune overall.
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zedsalt
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Date: April 30, 2005 @ 4:19 PM
The vocals remind me of Roger Waters…occasionally wavering around a central pitch for emotive effect, the over-enunciation of some of the hard consonants toward the same end. I’m not sure why, exactly, but the similarity is even more pronounced in the doubled bits. The guitar tone also has that bitter-but-listenable quality.
There’s little in the way of ambiguity here and really only one central irony…a fact which is of itself ironic. This song’s an especially good mood piece for an especially bad mood, a variety of bitterness that everyone has experienced at one point or another. Well done!
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ChaosSurfer
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Date: May 14, 2005 @ 10:18 AM
This has a pink floyd feel to me too, I think it's the vocals and particularly the vocal harmonies, full of that emotional quality I love. Guitars sound great and are really well balanced in the mix. Like the outro solo which winds the song down really nicely.
Great job
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stratmanstl
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Date: May 14, 2005 @ 12:28 PM
Definately hearing elements of Floyd, Roger Waters era also.
The vocals are a little loud in the mix, maybe some reverb and compression on them would make them blend in more.
Like the guitar sounds a lot and the lyric is great.
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 Traf
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Date: May 19, 2005 @ 4:53 AM
This is actually a clever little song. The melody and words are really interesting and unusual.
It's seems to have been slightly over recorded and the voice is distorted in places.
I really like the little guitar solo at the end. Nicely thought out and fits perfectly with the melody line.
Yeah... Good song
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SamPan
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Date: May 21, 2005 @ 4:42 AM
definite improvement with your vocals from past efforts. sounds like a detune effect on the vocals?
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SamPan
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Date: May 21, 2005 @ 4:42 AM
im half asleep meant detune on the guitar
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csaintg
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Date: June 1, 2005 @ 10:04 AM
I don't use a detune effect on the guitar, I detune it. I tune it down a half step to better fit my vocal range. I then plug it straight to the board, and pan it all the way to the left. I add the same reverb that is on the vocals to the left side. I also mike the guitar, and pan it all the way to the right. I use no effects to the wet mike. It gives the guitar a fuller feel. Almost as if there are two acoustics playing. I also use the same reverb as the vocal is set at, so it will feel like the guitar and vocal are in the same space.
I'm not sure how to fix the part that Traf says is "Over-recorded" I did the best I could to not overdo this song. I do all the intruments as well as the engineering, so it is all me. I would like to have some other expression in here, maybe someone would like to do a collaboration.
Chris.
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strum
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Date: June 7, 2005 @ 8:54 AM
nice acoutic tone, looks like you HAVE been working on getting better sound out of your coustic... Funny, lol I was expecting something else, i was expecting a messed up track, but this is a proper song, i like how you've made use of the word... the bass is a bit too low, if you ask me, nice and simple solo, works well for this song. done quite well, nice lyrics too... (took me to realize what your pics actually said, 'have you heard saintg' lol)... nice track
Ron
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TKD21
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Date: June 19, 2005 @ 11:42 AM
nice song buddy happy I came accross your web link
Keep Up The good Work!
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greatscottpr...
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Date: June 25, 2005 @ 7:46 PM
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hueseph
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Date: July 3, 2005 @ 7:44 PM
Great guitar tone. Nice playing. Just some suggestions(please add salt): The drums could come up in the mix a bit. If you back away from the mic a bit You'll get a better tone out of your voice. It'll also give you the freedom to belt it out a bit louder which I think would help your over all vocal sound. I think you hold it back a bit when you sing close. Let it rip so we can hear you sing!
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realmouse
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Date: July 3, 2005 @ 11:01 PM
Nice work. Record this at a studio, it'll come out awesome I reckon.
Thanks for the listen.
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 TDUBB
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Date: August 11, 2005 @ 3:52 AM
good guitar work but the vocal quality wasnt there i give this a 7 out 10
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Mattyleswan
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Date: August 24, 2005 @ 8:00 AM
this is a really nice track. I like how the drums kick in at the end and I feel the song is structured really well.
You're voice reminds me of a better version of mine. I tend to stray off tune at times, and am working really hard to improve my vocal strength.
The guitar work is very nice, the tone of the guitar reminds me of the sound of 'Nutshell' by Alice in Chains.
Looking forward to checking the rest of your stuff out.
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Snoogans775
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Date: October 2, 2005 @ 10:42 PM
I like the separation, it's could be softer, the guitar sounds good but, the that effect is bringing some uncomfortable sounds out of the high range.
I like your singing, it's very deliberate and focused, but you I think that you could have sung a little bit more expressively(though you already are), in exchange for some of the precision. like when you finish some words, and you really overpronounce the last syllable, that's not very enjoyable.
Nice bass sound. A little wild on the notes chosen for the bass solo, but other than that, the bass lines are well played.
Nice timing on the song, dull at the end.
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AdamsGod
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Date: October 8, 2005 @ 12:49 PM
this could be a great song, the vocls werent recorded well at all.
alof of peaking, distortion.
maybe you didnt use a compressor?
maybe the gain was realy high?
the huitar sounds nice tho.. alot of chorus used on it, right?
drums arent mixed very well.
i like the solo guitar alot tho.
could be a great song.
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Szabel
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Date: October 13, 2005 @ 6:34 AM
You can't sing.. it is terrible. You're singing bad notes and your voice is weak. That's of course only my opinion. As you can see you have many fans (I really don't know why..). Don't be mad on me, I'm not trying to be caddish, I'm honest.
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celtaidd
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Date: November 30, 2005 @ 6:53 PM
i like the melancholy of it. your voice seems very peter gabrielish, nice
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TameasDust
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Date: February 8, 2006 @ 11:21 AM
nice ... very very nice ... not distorted , which seems to be the norm now, clean clear and right in your face ... cool
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shutyatrap
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Date: February 11, 2006 @ 6:50 PM
This song i really like the emotions created from your lyrics and your playing on this really is pretty darn excellent. You may be a bit close to the mike at times i feel though. It had a bit of clipping because of this maybe. The melting of the 2 voices really works so good and the lyrics really are so full of hooks that after listen one my ears were ready to go again as it was swimming in my head.
Steve
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farfor44
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Date: April 1, 2006 @ 10:05 PM
mellowI like the way this song evolvesyes lovely tune bro..WTG/
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 karimv123
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Date: April 30, 2006 @ 7:47 PM
great guitar beat & recording quality awesome job
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evansorchid
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Date: August 6, 2006 @ 9:19 AM
Solid songwriting!!! Seems like everyone has an opinion on the vocals. lol. The vocal melody is outstanding. The vocal performance needs a bit of work. I'd probably play with some effects to cover up some of the various vocal glitches, but overall the tone of your vocals is rather midrange and might simply need some tweeking on the EQ.
But, I did enjoy how the tune progresses from the ethereal guitars in the intro to the driving meloncholy beat later on.
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ShadowMom
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Date: December 30, 2006 @ 2:21 PM
I don't think it's ironic... it's full of pathos, though. End of the road, the stuff heartbreak is made of. 
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